Fighting yourself
My stomach ached as I felt my pump buzzing.
"Oh goodness," I mumbled, "I forgot to bolus my lunch."
I could feel my numbers rising as my mom asked, "So how was lunch?"
I knew she was onto me. So I lied, "Awesome!"
"What did you enter?" She questioned.
Uh-oh, she caught me.
"Um, well here's the thing, I didn't." I answered sheepishly.
....
I checked my sugar, and of course I had off the charts numbers. I was so high off the charts I felt dizzy! A little too dizzy?
"Mom, I don't feel so well," I whispered.
"Oh, okay what isn't feeling we-"
"Oh, okay what isn't feeling we-"
I had passed out, it was the first time I had passed out, but I couldn't tell if I had had just passed out or...gone into a coma.
....
I couldn't open my eyes, I couldn't move, I couldn't talk! But why? Then it hit me. I was in a coma! A thousand thoughts were going through my mind, was I ever going to wake up? How long was I already asleep for? Where was I? I could hear a faint voice of my mom talking to the doctors and nurses and I knew I was in a hospital bed. I could tell my mom was crying because everyone once in a while I felt a tear drop roll down my arm, and a little sniff. I wanted to wake up and yell
"Hey mom, I'm okay!" but I knew that wasn't going to happen. So I just drifted off to sleep. I woke up to the sound of all of the machines surrounding me. Then I saw light, my eyes had sleepily risen open and my mom was looking at me with the happiest expression I've ever seen.
"I see you've awoken," The doctor stated as he examined my pulse, "You've been like a superhero fighting a villain, or in this case, your body!"
"A superhero," I thought, Not so bad Kaleigh."
....
"And that's the story of how I got into writing children's superhero books." I announced, "It's also when I learned a great lesson on how to take care of my body."
Wow great story! I didn't understand the beginning and where you said you didn't enter lunch.
ReplyDeleteGood story. I don't get how you got into the coma
ReplyDeleteGreat story! You just forgot the opening quotations when you say "not so bad"
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your story this week. Lots of details you have included into your story. You have three different parts to your story and the part that fits the prompt this week is your third part. Focus on making this part clear and concise. Read it over several times and to someone else and check for fluency and repetition of ideas. It is noticeable that you have been working on your punctuation when there is dialogue. Well done.
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