100 Word Challenge Week #4
The Balloon
The red balloon floated high above the clouds in the morning, and was among the flickering stars in the evening, but later that day I could no longer see it. I had let it go in hope that one day it would find it's way back to me, but I was just a little girl dreaming. Now I'm an adult, so there is no way that this red balloon that somehow ended up on my front porch could ever be the one I let go years ago. But deep, down inside of me, I hoped that it was.
Your story was very creative but you made a typo on the third line so you should fix that. Your spelling is great except for that one small thing and punctuation is correct. Great story!
ReplyDeleteI really love your story. It is very creative and has good description.
ReplyDeleteI liked your story and the descriptive words you used to make it more powerful and I liked how the balloon came back hopefully.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the descriptive words you used in your story, but I think you could change some of your sentence starters so that they aren't all just 3 or 4 letter words.
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